Next to Zelda’s desk the closet door had been left open. On
one shelf a sizable storage box held hundreds more photographs. A lot of the pictures
were Ed’s. She wouldn’t touch his, just hers. He’d have to deal with his
pictures later. But she didn’t know when that would be because Ed was the
clutter-bug in their marriage.
If Ed weren’t around she’d get rid of everything. Zelda hated
clutter. She remembered a time when her office was free of this sentimental
nonsense. A time when everything was clean and simple, her mind clear, so she
could think.
In the morning Zelda’s house was swarming with police.
Neighbors had observed the woman, clad only in a slip, carrying pile after pile
of belongings into her front yard.
One bystander reported, “She must have been working all
night.”
Another asked, “Where’s Ed?”
In the institution Zelda’s room was stark white. A bed stood
against one wall, a desk and chair against another. On the desk, one lamp, one
pad of lined paper, and one pen, her only possessions. Free of clutter. She
smiled.
(This story is an experiment in the flash fiction genre. I hope to be adding more stories, related to this one, in the future.)
12 comments:
Barb,
I like this Flash Fiction, and I want to know more about these characters. It makes me think of the Hoarders TV show, an eye-opener. Keep 'em coming!
Jacquie
interesting, at first I thought you were talking about me and Gordon, Haha
Thanks Jacquie. These characters are fun for me too. I'll try to keep them going.
Thanks Nan. Glad you could relate to these characters. Me too! Ha.
You know I really like this form of writing and this piece is a good example of flash fiction. Keep it up. Patsy
Most intriguing, Barbara. I look forward to more!
Thanks Patsy. It's a fun experiment.
Thanks Laura: Hope I can continue to interest you. Your blog posts have really inspired me too.
Barbara, this is an interesting story!
Good read...
Thanks Ana. I'm going to try to keep this story going.
This is hard to do, yet you've done it-- a lesson in clutterless writing. However, I'm trying to convince Deborah Taylor-French to allow up to 3000 words for her Redwood Writers mystery contest. I've edited my submission down to 2700 words and don't know where else to cut and keep the mystery. Where's Rod Serling when you nedd him?
Thanks, Elaine. Maybe you shouldn't cut anymore from your mystery. I tried to cut a story a while back and gave up. I sent something else into the contest. It is hard. This story just came to me short, but I'm going to add more in segments. I'm glad you like it.
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